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Ambivalence

I like older women

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Registered: 2016-05-30

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Visual Novels general

Discuss all kinds of VNs in this thread.

I just finished the introductory chapter, and WA2's pacing is really fucking slow, I hope it becomes the emotional nuke it is in the closing chapter.

Last edited by Ambivalence (2016-07-11 10:45:10)

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Don't use “thought” verbs too much: thinks, understands, loves, hates, and a hundred others. Instead of characters knowing, present the details that allow the reader to know them. Instead of a character wanting something, describe the thing so that the reader wants it. Only specific sensory detail: smell, taste, and sound.